Really interesting imagery and storytelling, I like the split scenes, I had to loop through a couple times to read all the dialogue and parse all the visuals.
Impressive poetic value, albeit some two text-box turns too much for each interaction. Even though I do understand it was just an excuse to bring in the actual poems. The interactive aspect, appeared underdeveloped, also featuring options infact unreachable in the game, further building up the sense of puzzling detachment. Soundtrack did a good job with depicting the flat stillness of an unfulfilled life.
interesting analysis. i must say i am new at this whole interactive fiction thing and this helps a lot.
however i am a bit confused at the first and last parts of this. what does "two text-box turns too much" mean? are you saying there was too much dialogue per interaction?
and that final verdict....ouch, but once again i am a rookie lol. got any suggestions? things you might wish for in the future?
(also, maybe i should have made it clear but this isnt going to be a standalone story. this game is only the beginning of a larger narrative i plan on discussing.)
In the biggest picture, avoid making the player feel trapped in any mechanical kind of situation. By 'mechanical', I mean, if a dialogue box starts, for example, make the dialogue end before the player feels that the thing drags for too long and the situation cannot be escaped properly before it actually ends by itself. The same applies to puzzles of sort and stuff. But in short, yeah, the dialogues are too long. Consider splitting it between more encounters, but do not spam encounters. It will automatically force you to make the gameworld bigger and more complex.
and that final verdict....ouch, but once again i am a rookie lol.
I did not say it is bad. I said it is too complicated. Which means, the idea may require reconsideration. Maybe a change of emphasis.
Remember an old theatrical rule, which means, if there is a gun hanging on the wall in the first chapter, in the last chapter at the latest, the gun ought to fire, making a difference. Avoid purposeless stuff, as it is distraction and players sometimes feel offended for being mislead.
This was wonderful, the words were so poetic and bleak that I couldn't help but be drawn further in with each character or object I interacted with. Thank you for making this
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this was such a good game! I did have a kind of disgusted/horrified expression though
thanks ! thats the intention :)
Really interesting imagery and storytelling, I like the split scenes, I had to loop through a couple times to read all the dialogue and parse all the visuals.
thank you! glad you enjoyed it
Impressive poetic value, albeit some two text-box turns too much for each interaction. Even though I do understand it was just an excuse to bring in the actual poems. The interactive aspect, appeared underdeveloped, also featuring options infact unreachable in the game, further building up the sense of puzzling detachment. Soundtrack did a good job with depicting the flat stillness of an unfulfilled life.
Too complicated for an actual game.
interesting analysis. i must say i am new at this whole interactive fiction thing and this helps a lot.
however i am a bit confused at the first and last parts of this. what does "two text-box turns too much" mean? are you saying there was too much dialogue per interaction?
and that final verdict....ouch, but once again i am a rookie lol. got any suggestions? things you might wish for in the future?
(also, maybe i should have made it clear but this isnt going to be a standalone story. this game is only the beginning of a larger narrative i plan on discussing.)
In the biggest picture, avoid making the player feel trapped in any mechanical kind of situation. By 'mechanical', I mean, if a dialogue box starts, for example, make the dialogue end before the player feels that the thing drags for too long and the situation cannot be escaped properly before it actually ends by itself. The same applies to puzzles of sort and stuff. But in short, yeah, the dialogues are too long. Consider splitting it between more encounters, but do not spam encounters. It will automatically force you to make the gameworld bigger and more complex.
I did not say it is bad. I said it is too complicated. Which means, the idea may require reconsideration. Maybe a change of emphasis.
Remember an old theatrical rule, which means, if there is a gun hanging on the wall in the first chapter, in the last chapter at the latest, the gun ought to fire, making a difference. Avoid purposeless stuff, as it is distraction and players sometimes feel offended for being mislead.
thanks dude! That’s some good advice and I’ll remember that for next time.
This was wonderful, the words were so poetic and bleak that I couldn't help but be drawn further in with each character or object I interacted with. Thank you for making this
thank you!! ;___; this means so much to me you have no idea....